Overall, I really liked this. I can make some pretty good guesses on the some of the impetus for this. Your thoughts on fanaticism and the ease of corruption others coming first to mind. One thing that especially interests me is your perspective prevented you from going down a certain path with this that I have seen many others follow: You seem to be actually showing Luna's perspective while still having it go to a possibly ominous place. Usually fics I see have such rebellion either justified or mostly justified and have characters being quite self righteous. (Luna is remorseful but it's still 90 percent Celestia's fault. Twilight turns against her mentor an second mother quite easily and Celestia is a tyrant). Though I haven't seen all fics and can't give and my perspective isn't fully comprehensive, I can say that I rarely see such point of views with emotional validity yet still being morally questionable, especially with somepony like Luna. Though I'm not sure where your going with future installments, and I don't want to pressure you to deliver on something you didn't plan to do, I still must say good job!
>The corruption of Luna,at least,my interpretation from her Lunar Republic and take on the bat ponie,comes from a personal experience that I don't want to talk about much.
Interesting. As I said I could tell you where writing it based on some things you said/done. I have found myself writing stuff channeling personal experiences (or at least emotional states) way more then I thought I would, even stuff that I'm not necessarily willing to talk about freely. As opposed to an inane story of Dolores fighting a losing war against living corn with several mid level obscure us congress members and psychic snail that bleeds fire. Yes, that randomly stupid.
>This is more like an explanation and I have fortunately found some time,to introduce how bat ponies got under her treatment. All of this with rushed thoughts and feelings in heat,so this corruption feels like a diary or letter to a being of good will but failed to see the eyes of someone else.
That is actually may favorite part, it feels like an organic flow of her consciousness and confusion. I can picture Celestia reading it. I can picture Luna writing it, with a mix of emotions and perhaps unstable penmanship.
>The adoctrination comes from my fear of leading this project.
As I've said before, don't worry about getting it done and work on it when you want to. Though I can understand some people can only get things done when they put strict schedules in place, and everyone is a little different. Regardless, treat this as experimentation and don't be afraid to veer off the beaten path.
>Luna takes the lead,as a young figure for a bunch of drones that blindly follow her in a short period of time,yet,nothing fills her feelings about her sister. Only the easiest thoughts come to her with her actions and coldly,focus on advancing her method of justification....of despair.
