>>5917 now, leaving aside the standards of quality and lore. I have found this quite funny: >Fred gets laid by literally every mare in the village that first night, and he doesn't even speak Ponish (The language barrier is another AU-element to this piece, although I weave that into the force-of-magic forcing conformity on the natives). >Granted that might be okay but that level accidental domination is never repeated >downgrade it to just the one mare, who was "assigned" to his care because she was the only non-illiterate whose weekend was coming up.
do you know what I would do here? If you are so worried in fixing that level of accidental domination and consider it as an irreversible flaw. If I were you, I would skip this part and discard it for the novel,saying:"Fuck it! Let's expand this golden moment to the maximum!"
Instead,this alpha moment for Fred could be perfectly used as the climax of a NSFW story with absolute freedom,detouring the tone of its main canon story.
I would title the fic something like this: "Magic of Illiterate mares...but I picked the non-illiterate one " and go for the craziest ideas that you have in mind for the wet dream of dominating mares explicitly without any shame.
