>>2138 >Probably your best from a pose standpoint; it never felt like it rushed or skipped anywhere. The pose wasn't complex but was a little bit above to me what you normally do. the show has matured along with the fans as well. Here, I am just focusing on a repeated theme that has come since the birth of the map concept: doing diplomacy instead of using magic. The problem is still related to what I wrote in my last fic just that in this one, it combines stress, lack of fun and some personal questions. Barely anything changes in this aspect. The concept is not new so I guess a better narration about what I know how to deal with, it shows like a slight improvement.
> you did much better with your descriptions and narration. It never awkwardly mixed like in some of your previous stories. It flowed smoothly . There is a lot of complexity and detail. I am not a professional writer but I must say that this took me like one entire evening to write it first and then 3 hours in the afternoon to translate it and get rid or add a few ideas, even a couple of lines in the last hour while posting it. That explains why it´s the longest fic, I didn´t look for the ending so quickly, just a full exposition of what´s presented over here. A slice of life show is absolute filler but that filler contains details that you have to keep an eye on and judge them as if it´s somewhat critical to the story. >Though it is ultimately a set up for the larger story, I really like the set up that pushed Celestia towards those thoughts. It felt like it could be in a episode of of the show. Overall I enjoyed it and like the thoughts raised. it is. I have imagined the follow up part for a few times between yesterday and today but who know what will happen in the end. The setup could perfectly fit in season 9 indeed. Nice to hear that enjoyment from yours.
>In a way it was reflective of yourself wasn't it? >I can see a path of you channeling some of that here. Though their still is other thought and story implications put in, even if they impetus is yourself. it´s reverse politics. Instead of trying to convey a political message, I am putting a political related experience that affected psychologically to the writer. It´s trendy to use media trying to fit for some agenda and ruin a cartoon/movie but here, you have to decompress it and fit in with other elements, context, lore, character... If you check my posts in the other thread, you will find that this is a medium to channel a bit that event and even funny how close it´s at times. Also, I wanted to filter politics and make the board a little bit more pony related, I was getting a bit sick of that topic and not facing the real deal. So here it is with a very different cover.....and meaning, maybe.
>Many would take it as the darkness as part of her nature and leave it at that by the text alone. Though it does fit. As it is Celestia accepting that the world can be cruel and painful and she needs to accept the distrust cynicism and negative instincts. and the worst part is that she is not used to handling it unlike somepony who learned that lesson several times before. That will lead to a situation in which she is guilty of not accepting that reality despite her age. One may be old and have lots of years on its back...but maturing doesn´t require any age but challenging one self and overcome it. Darkness is just one element that one learns to drive as anything else just that certain groups cannot go and do an effort to take a little step forward and control it.
