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Not sure I will fully finish this fic by the time you resume writing but I am posting some feedback now based on what I read so far. Half way... I think.

> That should give you time to consider whether you're going to respond here about it
This has been a interesting read. There is not one story but three stories I see in here:

A horrible, sucky story that makes me want to rip my eyes out.
Jack and Apple Jack in that first go around is utter dogshit. Twilight Sparkle's acquiesce in that situation and the relative non reaction of the ponies of the situation is either mine numbingly OCD against basic human nature, or, if she is acting out of fear, just painful to read in that light—Though may work as a horrific, I'll admit. Such a tone wasn't obvious.

A "meh" fic serviceable to a certain crowd.
I can smell the stench of a generic he fic world in here and such fanfic assumptions. It just waffles in and out. . The world being a bit sex crazy. Though this is really only in a borderline way. I only feel hints of this and it hasn't dived fully into this type of world. In fact I would say a couple of lines actually assuaged my concerns on this, but still. I don't always hate these but I think for them to have merit there has to be more going on then just shenanigans.

An actual good fic.
When the timeloop kicked off in full. I actually started to enjoy the story. The Characters teaming up in different ways and trying to deal with the threat of Jack is actually interesting. The timeloop feels well conceived and it seems you really thought out how the characters would react in different ways and are actually using the world of Equestria.

Overall, I am still judging, but I think I like this fic. Naturally, I have some issues with certain scene pacing and in your rushed writing you sometimes just tell not show. Though that is to be fixed after, not durring, nationalnowritennovember.